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Rewritten Thesis Statement
Although there are many educational programs on television, it is the commercials that negatively influence society because the majority of commercials are targeting young people under the age of eighteen.

When the boy that was eighteen years old he ate so much junk food and he is big because he watches to much television and he has health problems and he dose not eat healthy food only junk food and he can get diabetes by eating way to much junk food and watching to much television and thats y television is targeting younger people under the age of eighteen.
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